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I want to
tell you
that
I was never
much of a
liar
and
when it comes
to
fight or flight
I spread
my wings
and fly.
That humour is
my
survival instinct
and
I hate
a world
where kindness is
a poison
to be sucked dry.

But I can tell you also
that
when birds make nests
I let them be
and that
I'll catch your smile when it falls
so you'll never lose it
and that
when harsh words and city streets
get too much for me
I hold my ears
sing 'la, la, la,'
and I'll lose no sleep
over feeling free
or choosing latter
over
former
in the word
bittersweet.
17/01/2013
Thanks for reading!
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:iconindecisiveiam8888:
indecisiveiam8888 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I am the opposite. But I absolutely love this piece ^^ you're very talented :)
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"and I'll lose no sleep
over feeling free
or choosing latter
over
former
in the word
bittersweet."
:heart:

What a perfect way to end this piece.
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:iconbonfirelights:
bonfirelights Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
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:iconriseandbe:
RiseandBe Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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OniOfTheShade Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   General Artist
i love the ending!
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:iconbonfirelights:
bonfirelights Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks!
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:icononioftheshade:
OniOfTheShade Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013   General Artist
you're quite welcome!
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edge-of-psychosis Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My suggestion would be to write it in all lowercase. The caps at the beginning of each line is distracting. : P
[I also just personally love all lowercase]. (:
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:iconbonfirelights:
bonfirelights Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! I don't think I've ever written a poem in all lowercase before. I'll definitely try it out!
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edge-of-psychosis Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
To me it just makes the words look so pretty and it feels more artistic.
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