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With you I always feel like I’m
trying
    to break in the wrong size of shoes.
Sometimes I sit and stew
over how you’re seventeen and
you think I’m a princess
  the trapped-in-a-tower kind
          and how you wear suits and talk about politics
and think you know the world.

My throat interrupts with an affronted gurgling sound
sometimes when I think about you,

  and how
you deal out advice where it just isn’t called for
you quote science-fiction to justify war
and you’re seventeen years old and you think I’m a princess
and you just have no blooming idea.

Darling, one of these days I will tell you my mind
But until then we’ll never fit
                                          right.

In truth
I’m afraid –
that even after that day
  you’ll still be trimmed hedges and high picket fences
when I want a field, open wide.
Do you ever have that friend who seems cool at first, but then it gradually gets to the point where everything they say just makes you think ugh?
Because same haha.

I played around with the indentations in this, which I haven't really done before. I thought it suited the theme of not fitting. I hope it works well.

Thanks for reading!
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh my gosh I totally know that kind of person! It's irritating as hell. :hug: This poem is brilliant!
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euphoricmadness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh and I thought the indentations were a very clever idea. Worked well imho. :)
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euphoricmadness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Ha, we need to be friends then. It seems I'm so like you & all the people I know seem to be the ones you wrote about.
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KageNoKarasu Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Yes, I know this feel so very much and we're not even 17.
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
completely agree. i'm an open-minded person and trying to reason with a resolutely close-minded person (lots of my friends, acquaintances) feels like stupidly hitting my head with a brick. i just can't get through to them, and sometimes i just give up trying. that way we can sort of peacefully coexist.
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TalonArt Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Love it!
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xxAndi-chaNxx Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student Writer
This is such a great poem! It relates so well to a situation I'm having to face with a roommate.... Like you said, ugh.
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The-Lighted-Soul Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Goodness gracious his is incredibly accurate! I've been dealing with this exact thing lately! Excellent work m'dear!
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nirvanaclaims Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
;-; wow. beautiful. things to think about this one does give.
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SuperPander Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
I know the feeling. Personally I may be one of those people. But, at least I regret being born, or at least feel bad for it. If that's any consolation.
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