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You criticised the way I write

with words

    spread out

                                                          like this

and I

     I wondered if you were, for once,

 saying something right.




But I deserve

            to take up
                                                                        space

my words deserve

                          to fill a page


I hope they cover
                           
     continents

one day.
16/12/2013
Thanks for reading!
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Writer
This is beautiful! I love it! :heart:
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you! :hug:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student General Artist
I agree with drifter-dallyings - that last sentence was LOVELY.
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow. The last line. Oh my. Just...wow. :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014   General Artist
brilliant :heart:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love how much this says in so few words. Well done!
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CurtainRodFace Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This. I absolutely adore this. So much strength.
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xtcgm Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
Nicely put.
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Graphix-Goddess Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Wow. That's beautiful! You're right, too! I wish all writers the luck and joys of being able to spread their words across the world !
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're right! Why should you be contained to something so small? Great job :clap:
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Ally-RedTulip Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love this, it's an awesome message!
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Like this, but agree with mediafreq on the punctuation - be consistent and either use it throughout or not at all. More punch without, imo. Adds sass to the push-back.  I'd also suggest not faltering on an uncertain sounding note of 'hope' for your ending.  I'd BELIEVE, and strongly!

I believe they will cover...  :D (Big Grin) 
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Cool, thanks for the feedback.
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L-Inque Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A great come back to the critics, some of whom don't know what they are talking about. 
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks!
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carmennge Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love how you used the space to get your message across.. super clever! :) The last line is awesome!
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Aerode Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the ending. Great job! :clap:
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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Aerode Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's my pleasure! :D
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Forthemillionthtime Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
I love this so, so much :)
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks! (:
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Forthemillionthtime Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
no problemo :D
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mediafreq Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013   Photographer
As do we all. Very smart idea. Maybe too, just leave out all of the punctuation marks? After all, you could well serve it up as just one long sentence.
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! (: And thanks for the suggestion, haha.
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Inactive102 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
Beautiful and powerful!
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! (:
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student Writer
this is amazing
I love
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks! <3
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AJ-Dion Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Nice :D (Big Grin) 
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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Tavoriel Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this, very powerful!
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bonfirelights Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks! (:
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